revise paper based on feedback needs to be excellent writing

bureaucracy in public administration
October 15, 2021
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October 15, 2021

revise paper based on feedback needs to be excellent writing

This paper needs to be revised based on the feedback below…EVERYTHING IN THE MASTERY LIST NEEDS TO BE INCORPORATED IN THE PAPER!! I FAILED IT MISERABLY. PLEASE HIGHLIGHT IN YELLOW WHAT YOU ADDED TO THE PAPER PLEASE!

feedback:

COM-20091 Project Rubric feedback:
Hi Tanisha! Your project is not yet mastered, but we will discuss how to make it stronger. I’m Anne Morgan, one of the instructors for this course, and I reviewed your materials. All feedback is in chronological order, with the most recent feedback and newly completed auto-populated rubric criteria at the bottom of the general feedback box.

Now let’s talk about your project submission! You have included a good deal of sound material in the document. Most of the points that have not been earned are due to an absence of required criteria. Please see the comments below, pertaining to individual rubric items, for more details. If you have any questions, please reach out to me via the Private Channel for Discussions, and I will respond as promptly as I can.

Best regards,
Anne

Gathering Information: Describes research techniques to gather data that can help describe an audience: You provide a good description of multiple research techniques and areas.

Gathering Information: Describes a rule or law that professionals must follow when using audience research techniques: Dispensing with preconceived ideas about the data you will gather is indeed an important practice to follow when researching.

Gathering Information: Describes the ethics a professional should keep in mind while researching: Educated assent–usually referred to as “informed consent”–is a suitable ethical consideration to discuss here.

Managing Audience Information: Describes a rule, regulation, or law that teams must follow to appropriately manage the personally identifiable information collected: I’m afraid I don’t see discussion about a rule, regulation, or law pertaining to the managing of audience information. Did I simply miss it? If there is no specific discussion of a rule, regulation, or law, please add such discussion. If I simply missed your discussion thereof, please revise that part of the discussion so that it’s more clear that fulfills this part criterion of the project rubric.

Managing Audience Information: Describes the repercussions of a real-world legal violation by a company or organization: Please include a clear example of the repercussions to a real-world organization of breaking the law, regulation, or rule that you describe for the previous rubric item.

Managing Audience Information: Describes a professional ethical standard that guides how the organization should manage audience information:Both transparency (an aspect of honesty) and recognition of diversity are important ethical consideration.

Managing Audience Information: Describes the repercussions of a real-world ethical violation by a company or organization: The Everlane Clothing debacle is an appropriate example to include here.

Using Audience Information to Strengthen Messages: Provides an example of how audience information can be used to strengthen messages for a target audience:
I did not see discussion of how to use audience information for strengthening message. Please include such information to fulfill the three rubric criteria associated with it.

General: Clearly conveys meaning with correct grammar, sentence structure, and spelling; shows understanding of audience and purpose: There are a few too many major errors of grammar for the reader to clearly and consistently follow the discussion. Please carefully proofread the document to locate and fix these errors. The final product need not be perfect, but it does need to contain sufficiently few errors that a reader would be neither confused nor distracted by them.

General: Lists sources where needed using citation methods with no major errors: You’ve done well in this area!

Project Rubric: Legal and Ethics Training

Gathering Information
Describes research techniques to gather data that can help describe an audience☐ Mastered


☐ Not YetDescribes a rule or law that professionals must follow when using audience research techniques☐ Mastered


☐ Not YetDescribes the ethics a professional should keep in mind while researching☐ Mastered


☐ Not Yet
Managing Audience Information
Describes a rule, regulation, or law that teams must follow to appropriately manage the personally identifiable information collected☐ Mastered


☐ Not YetDescribes the repercussions of a real-world legal violation by a company or organization☐ Mastered


☐ Not YetDescribes a professional ethical standard that guides how the organization should manage audience information☐ Mastered


☐ Not YetDescribes the repercussions of a real-world ethical violation by a company or organization☐ Mastered


☐ Not Yet
Using Audience Information to Plan Communications
Provides an example of how audience information can be used to strengthen messages for a target audience☐ Mastered


☐ Not YetDescribes the ethical factors that a team must consider when using audience information to strengthen messages☐ Mastered


☐ Not YetDescribes what happened as a result of real-world ethical violations by a company☐ Mastered


☐ Not Yet
General
Clearly conveys meaning with correct grammar, sentence structure, and spelling; shows understanding of audience and purpose☐ Mastered


☐ Not YetLists sources where needed using citation methods with no major errors☐ Mastered


☐ Not Yet

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